Thursday, November 1, 2007

Ben Stallworth
EN 101
Adam Weinstein
November 1, 2007
American Honor
It’s obviously natural human behavior to have personal opinions. These differing opinions, inside the United States and international, sometimes lead to violence. This violence can range from just being angry and yelling at another person or lead all the way to war in some cases. It is very important to have your own set values and beliefs. When I say personal values and beliefs, I mean it is admirable to take an honest stand against something that you truly think is wrong. No one should be in favor of war; however, it should be understandable when war is necessary. That’s the hard part: who decides at what cost, at what time, or under what circumstances war becomes necessary? Once the deciding factor is made, how do you get people to agree and join your cause? Toby Keith is an arguable model of practically excellence when it comes to these ideas. He has two songs he sings that provide perfect examples of these ideas and beliefs: American Soldier and The Courtesy of The Red, White, and Blue.
In Toby’s song American Soldier, he calls himself an American soldier in a metaphorical way. He’s comparing the lifestyle of a working father trying to support a family to the lifestyle of a soldier at war. Toby is comparing the struggles of fatherhood/adulthood to the struggles on the battlefield. He says that he’s “Up and at ‘em bright and early”. He claims that “[He] don’t do it for the money…[He] don’t do it for the glory”. He gets up every morning to provide his family with a future and because it’s his responsibility: “Providing for our future is [his] responsibility”. He makes a change of direction after he sings about taking care of his responsibilities. He moves on to make a point of caution and pride. Toby Keith sings like he has his convictions set in stone: “Hey I’m solid, hey I’m steady, hey I’m true down to the core”. If anyone or anything challenges his place or responsibilities, he doesn’t overlook that person or thing. He is offended and takes action, “When liberty’s in jeopardy, I will always do what’s right”. He calls himself an American Soldier because “I don’t want to die for you, but if dyin’s asked of me, I’ll bear that cross with honor, cause freedom don’t come free”. That frame of mind is required to be an American Soldier and in a metaphorical sense a father (http://www.lyrics.com/lyric.php?id=19641).
Following September 11, 2001, there have been many different opinions about America, the Middle East, terrorism, and war. Mr. Keith’s song The Courtesy of The Red, White, and Blue has a slight difference in meaning than his song American Soldier. In The Courtesy of The Red, White, and Blue, Toby sings more about pride, respect, and honor. When America was attacked, we made it known to the entire world and it’s every inhabitant that America has too much pride and honor to be the victim of a cowardly hit-and-run operation. Keith describes this by singing “Soon as we could see clearly through our big, black eye, Man, we lit up your world like the Fourth of July”. If America’s door is knocked on, needless to say, she’ll answer; “This big dog will fight when you rattle his cage…And the eagle will fly and it’s gonna be hell…And it’ll feel like the whole wide world is raining down on you”. Toby says that America will find justice when necessary: “Justice will be served and the battle will rage…Cause we’ll put a boot in your ass it’s the American way” (http://www.lyrics.com/lyric.php?id=19651).
Toby Keith constructs his message around a topic that is responsive to most Americans. He does this for a reason. He is reminding everyone that America took a cheap shot. He is telling his audience that we should, and we do, take pride in acquiring justice for those responsible for September 11th. Pride, honor, and dignity are emotions. Toby uses raw emotion and feeling about our country to energize his audience. Not only are his lyrics invigorating, but also he takes advantage of his music videos. The scenery in his music videos for these two songs is fairly similar. The videos consist of inspirational clips ranging from soldiers in Iraq, Civil War soldiers, family home videos, to videos of Toby’s “freedom-decorated” concerts in the Middle East. Watching inspirational actions comparable to those in his music video put together with either of these two songs is motivating. Toby is trying to make the American people use emotion and adrenaline to realize what is right, just, and true. He’s telling the world that the United States will not be a scapegoat or a victim of cowards.
Negatively, adrenaline runs out and emotion doesn’t last forever. At the point in time that the songs are being heard, especially in certain atmospheres, the emotion should be overwhelming. However, it’s not certain that the next day a person will be as energized about the cause or situation as before when hearing the song. On a positive note, is there a more powerful motivation factor other than dignity and honor? The use of emotion as motivation for a cause can be one of the most powerful fuels to put in the tank; unfortunately, it’s probable to burn the fastest too.
Toby Keith met his goals with his songs American Soldier and The Courtesy of The Red, White, and Blue. Obviously he didn’t write either of these songs with the purpose of people being inspired to join the army. He wrote them for a number of reasons. Every purpose for his composing these two works is understood and appreciated. Toby succeeded at reminding his audience to always do what’s right, thanking America’s armed forces, reminding the American people and others that we take pride in our country, and most of all at making everyone around the world aware that America “will put a boot in your ass”.

Works Cited
1) http://www.lyrics.com/lyric.php?id=19641 - American Soldier
2) http://www.lyrics.com/lyric.php?id=19651 - The Courtesy of The Red, White, and Blue

4 comments:

nickneveu said...

During your essay, “American Honor,” you did a very good job dissecting the lyrics and text in both songs. I also enjoyed the interpretation of both songs by the same artist. It is easier to see the parallels between his songs and beliefs with two songs to back it up. You should also use this to strengthen the fact that he might be the persona. Another aspect that was very affected was your introduction. Asking questions is a super strong way to hook a reader and you did a very nice job.
One thing to work on would be organization. You could easily reconstruct the essay to make it flow easier. When you get to the second song you just spit out facts and there is no real order to it. My suggestion would be to say a fact, relate it to the text, and give an example straight from the text right after. This would help with ambiguous sentences and bunched facts. Another aspect I would work on would be the conclusion. It seems like yours is a body paragraph crammed into a conclusion. It would work better if you could split this paragraph up to have a clear, concise ending point for your essay.
Overall, this was a great essay. It brought many great interpretations and facts forward. I would work on organization and structure to better the caliber of essay. Other than that, fix simple grammatical errors and try to use proper quotations for the song titles.

jlford said...

I thought this was a very good paper, especially the content. I feel like you could improve your style and organization though. For example I understood your thesis to be that Toby Keith is “arguable model of practically excellence when it comes to these ideas,” regarding the factors that determine whether or not a war is necessary. But you never try to prove why he is good at this. You might want to develop a stronger thesis that is built around the songs themselves and not Toby Keith. The majority of your paper is spent dissecting the lyrics of both songs, and explaining their effect and purpose, as it should be. This is all clear and well thought out, but I think you could be more specific on what the purpose is. You say he doesn’t want us to join the army. Why? You say the purpose is understood and appreciated but I don’t say what it is. The paper could also be better organized. When you are starting a new paragraph on another topic, try making the first line of that paragraph a sentence a topic sentence that you will prove in the paragraph that follows. It should be in effect, a mini-thesis that also backs up your original thesis. For example when you begin talking about Keith’s second song, The Courtesy of The Red, White, and Blue you might say in the first sentence that the song is about the feelings of pride, respect, and honor that followed 9/11. Then discuss the different opinions following 9/11 and this song’s differences from the previous one. Also I would just try to clear up the language of a few of your sentences. For example when you say “on a positive note,” and then state a question. While I understand what you mean, it just doesn’t sound right. All in all though I thought this was a very good paper with an extremely well crafted critical interpretation. By way I really liked the metaphor about fuel.

Marian said...

Overall, I really enjoyed your paper. I like how you asked questions in your introductory paragraph,” who decides at what cost, at what time, or under what circumstances war becomes necessary? Once the deciding factor is made, how do you get people to agree and join your cause? “That really gets the reader into the story, wanting to learn the answers to these questions. I also like how you interpreted both songs into your paper and compared Toby Keith to his songs,” Toby is comparing the struggles of fatherhood/adulthood to the struggles on the battlefield. “I really like your use of brackets, you don’t see that often! But, one thing I did notice was the organization of your paragraphs. I feel like they jump from one thing to the next. Also, with so many quotations, I feel like you could go into more detail about how you interpret these quotations. When you say,” He’s telling the world that the United States will not be a scapegoat or a victim of cowards,” you should describe how he does this a little more. Overall, this was an excellent paper! Your interpretation of both songs was great! I really enjoyed it! If you just fix the small things, this paper will be at its finest! Good job :)

clbanks said...

Hey Ben!
Firstly, I enjoyed reading this! You have great text interpretation. What’s better? You includes many direct quotes from each of the songs. Your organization is great too! A well-organized paper states a thesis, shows supporting evidence for that thesis, and then summarizes. You have done this. However, one thing that I recommend you filter through is the body of your paper. You definitely included significant quotes from the songs; yet, you can add more elaboration to each. What I mean by this is that you support your opinion with these quotes throughout the paper, but you need to discuss each quote INDIVIDUALLY with part of your interpretation of the text. For example, in your essay you had a paragraph with a lot of quotes:
“Keith describes this by singing ‘Soon as we could see clearly through our big, black eye, Man, we lit up your world like the Fourth of July’. If America’s door is knocked on, needless to say, she’ll answer; ‘This big dog will fight when you rattle his cage…And the eagle will fly and it’s gonna be hell…And it’ll feel like the whole wide world is raining down on you’. Toby says that America will find justice when necessary: ‘Justice will be served and the battle will rage…Cause we’ll put a boot in your ass it’s the American way’”
It’s hard to find your thesis and opinion stated in this paragraph. Basically, be careful not to OVER quote…It’s fine to use numerous quotes; however, you should always include elaboration on each. Also try a definite paragraph break when you switch topics from your interpretations to Toby Keith in the first paragraph. It would create a pause that could be essential to the reader.